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Well, description. Description is always good. You're getting better, but I've always thought you under-described, and it makes it duller and less impactful. Good explanations for people helps them imagine the scene, and it's not how you imagine it that matters, it's how well you can translate the image to words.
Another thing is quirks. Not just little quirks that show up once in a while, but consistant themes to make them somewhat unusual from the archetype. I'm not really sure how to explain it, but...just things that make them seem "real". Realistic flaws and desires, caveats that fall, and yet realistic morality, most people not being heartless nor complete saints. Of course, this is just my thoughts, and it's hard for me to translate this...
Also, I think you need to be a little more consistant. No offense, but it seems like Agni and Sakura bounce around a little, and some seem to just be attached, but I can't say change that because it's new, and that might be why.
Don't forget, you don't just need to post the action. In down times, the characters interactions with each other are important, how they mesh and how they don't, who gets along with who, how they function outside of their jobs...it, again, helps with the "real" factor.
As for the question, first or third, I would say this. Try both. Write the next chapter in both, and see which satisfies you most. Maybe post both and see reactions. If it's close, then maybe do this for a few chapters. In a story, I always think best to ask the readers what is best then guess. I, personally, like third person, but I sometimes mix it with second. And it doesn't hurt I'm a VERY moral ambiguity writer, so being in first person sometimes makes things to black and white to fix my story, though it can be used to show flaws. I think it just depends on how the story progresses, how you feel when you actually write it and how it turns out. Just try both.
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"The fact of evil and good is undeniable. Bad men cannot be prevented from doing evil deeds, nor can good men be pushed back from doing the right in their heart. Why, therefor, do we hold back the power of the good to stop the bad? Do you not believe there is more good in the world then there is bad? I do. And with more good than bad, then that is how the world shall turn. And if there are more bad people, then is that not but the will of the masses? Why should we few be allowed to decide their fate, if they wish for what we deem evil? Let all hold the power. And let all decide with that power." - ???
"The world slows to a crawl. Men and women fight each other over petty pasts and trife rivalries and I sort out the pieces. If not for men like me, where would the world be but ruin? This is why my vision exists. One nation, united, under rule, through liberty and justice for all. Who cares if, perhaps, a few rights must be crushed to save a nation, or that secrets must be held the people do not know of? Is not one life worth that of a hundred? A hundred that of a thousand? Millions that of a world? Even if my method is wrong, what we lead now can only bring us to utter ruin and inescapble chaos. So I will continue to fight for what I believe is right, and you will do the same. And we will see who is stronger in their resolve." - ???
"I get asked one question a lot. How can I do such horrible things? How can I murder, and chatkill and do all these evil things without remorse? It's because their insignificant in the grand scheme of things. One person in the universe makes no difference. This world, in a universe of millions upon millions of worlds, is nothing. If nothing means anything, why should I not indulge myself in what little pleasure exists for an insect as myself? And if I must crush other insects, or use them to get it, I will. And what are you going to do about it? An insignificant resistance?" - ???
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